I personally do not think it meets the army writing style. However, for an NCOER, it is usually dumbed down because how many people will really understand what is trying to be said?
Too many leaders have no idea what it takes to be effective writers. Most are too lazy to look in a thesaurus or even a dictionary. The bullet you posted as an example is a classic copy and paste bullet.
Does that person(you)really have 12 Soldiers? No team leaders?
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